Mystery+Stories+Written+by+Room+3

**Writing to Entertain** For writing this term we have been focusing on writing to entertain. We decided that the purpose of our writing was to entertain the other children in the school by making a class mystery stories book.

Before we started writing our own mystery stories we learnt about what a great mystery story has. This is what we came up with...

Your story starts with speaking,action or something exciting to hook the reader in. ||  ||   ||   ||   ||   || Your characters need to be well described and can be pictured by the reader. The characters need to suit the story. These may include a victim, detective, strange person or creature ||  ||   ||   ||   ||   || You need to describe the setting to explain what it looks, smells, feels, sounds like. ||  ||   ||   ||   ||   || The story builds up to a problem that is exciting and makes the reader want to read on. ||  ||   ||   ||   ||   || Your problem gets more complicated. ||  ||   ||   ||   ||   || Your story needs to include a solution that solves the problem and ties all the complications in together. ||  ||   ||   ||   ||   || Hints that help the detectives and reader solve the mystery. They can be things people say or do or objects that are found. ||  ||   ||   ||   ||   || - Strong verbs to add action into your writing - 1 or 2 similes to add impact ||  ||   ||   ||   ||   || Speaking between characters ||  ||   ||   ||   ||   || E.g. Commas, full stops, capital letters, question marks, hyphen, speech marks, exclamation marks. ||  ||   ||   ||   ||   ||
 * **Room 3’s Criteria for a GREAT Mystery Story** ||
 * || **Plan** || **Draft** || **Author Circle** || **Self Edit** || **Outside Edit** ||
 * **Title** ||  ||   ||   ||   ||   ||
 * **Introduction**
 * **Characters**
 * **Setting**
 * **Problem**
 * **Complication**
 * **Solution**
 * **Clues**
 * **Descriptive Language**
 * Adjectives add impact to the story and make it more exciting to read.
 * **Speaking**
 * **Punctuation**
 * __**Next ste**__ ||

Here are our mystery stories we have written. We hope you enjoy them. Leave some feedback on the discussion thread for the children on their writing. All you need to do is click on the tab called discussion at the top and start writing. include component="comments" page="Mystery Stories written by Room 3" limit="20" Daniel Goes Missing Daniel fell of the beam but got up and tried again.

Daniel was a 16-year-old boy who was very sporty he had lots of friends but his best friends were Zac and Greg. Zac and Greg were twins but were very different. Zac was tall and fast and Greg was short and slow but Greg had all the brains. Daniel had three other friends they were Nathan, Harrison and Cory. Daniel loved going to the gym as he was very sporty but he had never cleared the beam. Another thing about Daniel is that he hated his friends always watching him.

One day his friends went to get some V, so Daniel was left alone but when they got back with a can of V for him he was gone! They looked everywhere, even in the staff room but he wasn’t there. Then Cory shouted, ‘’ there’s Daniel’s jersey”. They all ran over to it and they took it to the police. The policeman asked them some questions but they told him they didn’t know anything about his disappearance. So they went back to the gym but on there way Greg said “if the police aren’t helping we’ll have to find Daniel on our own” and everyone agreed. So they double checked the gym and then heard a cried of help and it was coming from one of the classrooms.

So they ran to the hall way and opened Room 14’s door but he wasn’t in there .So they went to Room 13 and opened the door and there he was Daniel was tied to a chair with duck tape over his legs.in room 13 was filled with chairs and desks.” Daniel what are you doing here” they all said together as they took a step forward. Daniel shouted “now,” but it was too late they were hanging in the air. Right at that moment the police came in and they were free. All of children were wondering who had told the police they were in the room but when they looked at the clock it said 9:00 and they realised it must have been there mums. When they got home they were certain it was them.

By Gregor Clarkson

**// Dad got shot!!! //**  **// By Jabari //** // Pow, Pow, Pow!!! //  “Can we go to the club rooms at war for real” moaned Sam. ”Maybe” said dad. Sam is was a young boy who loved motor biking. One snowy Monday Sam and his dad were watching a war movie to show Sam what it was like at war. Sam’s dad was a war coach. He had been at war many times and nearly shot.

“Time for tea” yelled mum. ”Coming” groaned the boys. For tea they were having sausages, burgers and vegetables.

The next day Sam went school and had a student teacher. Because she didn’t know how to teach they did fun games all day. When the bell rang Sam saw his dad. Usually his mum would pick him up. When he went up to his dad he asked ”where’s mum”. His dad said it was a surprise. When they went to the car they didn’t have the normal car they had an off road jeep. At first he thought the surprise was the new car. Then he thought it was a safari drive then he knew it was the war clubrooms. When they stopped he saw two motorbikes and a long dirt track. “Well what are you waiting for” shouted Sam’s dad giving him a fright. When they hopped out Sam’s dad got the gear for the motor ikes and they put it on. They hopped on the bikes and Sam asked, ”Where’s the electric start button?” “There is no electric start Sam, instead it has a kick start” said his dad. Then Sam’s dad taught him how to kick start it. When the bikes were started they set off. Dad went first, then Sam. When they got to the end of the dirt track Sam saw a huge metal door on the ground and a green pad finger scanner. Sam and his dad hopped off the bikes and his dad bent down and put his fingers on the green pad finger scanner. After 5 seconds the door made a loud beep. Then Sam’s dad opened the metal door and whispered, “Go in quickly and quietly”. When he got inside he could see guns, swords, shields, grenades and quads. “Can I go on a quad?” asked Sam. “No but nice try” replied Dad. Then Sam saw a door saying **STAFF ONLY**. All of a sudden Sam heard loud banging behind the door it sounded like some one nailing nails down. Sam asked if he could go in. Because his dad needed to go to the toilet and the toilets were through there it was a yes. When they went in Sam could smell rotten food. “I’ll be in the toilet just wait here “said Sam’s dad. When Sam’s dad went to the toilet Sam heard a gun shot coming from the toilet. When Sam went into the toilet he saw that his dad had been shot in the arm and an open window. Then he got out his cell phone and rung 111. The address was 123-Buttercup Road. When they answered he said the address and they said they would be there soon. “Oh no” said Sam “I forgot to tell them about the dirt track they won’t make it through the track it’s too skinny” worried Sam. “Well then go meet them” shouted his dad. So Sam did that. When he was nearly at the end the bike stopped he had accidently pressed the key ejection button. Luckily he had spare key. At the end he saw a limo and an ambulance. A man in black hopped out of the limo and said “I’m going to take care because the ambulance isn’t here” “oh really look behind you” instead he put a sack over him. Then he was in a lab suddenly bang the door opened and the police and Sam’s dad was there the police pulled out a bullet with a picture of the man in black “you’re arrested.”

The End

**CASE OF THE MISSING**

 SHOP items!!!!
“This looks awesome!! I’ll take it “said Bobby. Bobby was 16 years old. He had dark black Hair and a black jacket. Bobby went out of the shop with his new cellphone before he could Leave he saw an article in the paper about things going missing from shops!! Bobby went out to untie steel. Bobby and steel walked down to the beach then suddey a car Went flying over there heads. Bobby ran over to the car “are you okay?” said bobby steel Barked madly. “ what is it?” yelled Bobby. Suddey a giant lizard came out of the blazing fires. Bobby heard a bang from the shop. He ran inside the shop. Inside the shop was only one Wardrobe. “What happened here” said Bobby. Bobby leaned on the wardrobe to think what had happened instead he fell backwards!!He had found a tunnel. Bobby went in. The tunnel was pitch black and smelt like coins. Bobby went on throw the tunnel. At the end he could see a dim light .When he got closer he saw a chair and a tv next to lots of money . Suddey the lizard came charging out of the money!!! Bobby saw a bucket of water out of The corner of his eye he grabbed he poured the water over the lizards head suddey its head Blew off “wow” said bobby. Bobby looked that the head it was robot the signal was coming from the shop. then the guy in a cloak ran to the door then suddey the door came flying Knocking the guy backwards and steel came charging in!! “Hey it’s the shop keeper!!!” Said bobby. “Yes I want to buy Hollywood” “but you won’t bobby rang the police to come and Get the shop keeper. beep!! Beep!! Beep!!

THE END!!! By Jake Clearwater

** THE CASE OF THE MISING CHILDREN **
 * By Ben Jones **

“I’ll race you to the playground” said Harry. Harry was an 8 year old boy with black hair and a funny personality. As Harry and Scott raced to the playground Scott suddenly stopped.“ What’s wrong Scott?” whispered Harry. Scott was a 12 year old boy and he was very fast, he also had blonde hair. “Look over there,” yelled Scott.“ No ones in the playground”. Scott and Harry were both thinking the same thing {where is everybody?} They both walked slowly to the playground. The playground had 2 blue slides, a climbing wall, monkey bars and a ladder. Underneath the playground there was woodchips. As they got closer to the playground some children came running into playground.“Lets play hide and seek” shouted Harry. Harry was in “1,2,3 ready or not here I come,” yelled Harry. Scott got found first but they couldn’t find the other children. Scott and Harry both didn’t know where they were. “Where are they” said Harry. Just then Harry some footprints leading to the car park. They followed the footprints but then the footprints stopped. Harry and Scott looked high and low but they still couldn’t find the children anywhere. They finally gave up and waited in the playground for 2 minutes. Then 1 of the children came back to the playground. Then all the other children came back to the playground. “Where were you?” said Harry and Scott together. All the children yelled, “We were over there in the bushes”. “Oh” said Scott. “That was the only place that we didn’t look,” said Harry. “See you later” said Scott and Harry then they both walked home.

By Max WolF
Beep, beep, beep as Chris’s phone was dialling 911. “Why are you dialling 911?” asked Dobby. “Look there is a bank robbery over there”, Chris explained to Dobby. Chris was 16 years old, he has his driver’s license and black hair and he loves chocolate. Suddenly the robbers sprinted out of the bank with heaps and heap of money. Just as the police arrived the robbers were gone. Chris and Dobby went to investigate. They saw smashed glass, footprints, a piece of hair and fibre, fingerprints and a skin cell. Chris could hear alarms ringing, staff screaming and crunching under his feet. In the corner of Chris’s eye he could see a red light flashing then he realised it was just an alarm. Suddenly the police burst into the bank. Chris and Dobby sprinted and they followed the money trail that led them to the robbers hide out. Then Chris and Dobby went back to the bank and convinced the police to follow them to the to the robbers secret hide out. The police followed Chris and Dobby and they shouted at the robbers “stick your hands in the air”. After that they took them to the police station and all the evidence that was left behind matched the robbers and the robbers and were sentence to jail for 10 years. After that day Chris and Dobby were heroes. THE END

** The Missing Beam ** “Woo,Woo, faster,faster,faster” shouted coach Harry. He was shouting at his class to run faster over the hurdles. Beep, beep, beep the big loud bell rang through out the school hall. “Whooo end of class” said coach Harry. “Yahh” shouted Josh and his class. Josh was a young popular kid in St Krupps school.After lunch they went back to the gym when Josh walked in he noticed that the school beam was missing. Then when coach Harry moved the soft mats for gymnastics he saw a little door where the school beam used to be. The gym smelt like sweet, smelly socks and sticky feet. You could see soft mats and a climbing wall on the wall. So Josh raced back to his school bag and got out his brown cloak and hat. “Finally” he said as he grabbed his magnifying glass. “Now to go and investigate” he said to himself. When he got close to the spot where the beam used to be he found a strand of hair below the climbing wall. Just then he fell through the floor and down a pipe. “Ow” he said as he hit the ground. “Help” he shouted but no one could hear him. Then he saw a stair case leading up so he climbed up it. When he got to the top he opened a door and came out of the climbing wall. Later that day Josh went to examine the hair. He took it home with him that night.The next day he came back to school and went through the door when he got to the bottom he heard voices. Then he saw it, the school beam! He pulled out his handcuffs and walked on in and said “your under arrest for stealing our school beam”. After that they towed the school beam up the stairs and everything went back to normal.
 * By Cory **

THE END.

** THE MYSTERY. ** “Wow, that is humongous. I wonder what is inside? Tom thought as he ran as fast as a cheetah. “I want to explore this place” yelled Tom. He had forgotten to be quiet .He just knew that if no-one was there it must be an unknown School. The unknown School looked like it had white mold on the walls. Tom could see broken windows and he could smell mud. As he got closer he could hear owls hooting from the roof.
 * By Ruby **

As he turned around starring proudly at the school his bag dropped on the ground. While Tom was starring at the school a sneaky person ran and stole his bag. Tom stopped starring and turned around. He looked on the ground and he noticed his bag wasn’t there. He felt on his back, it wasn’t there either. Tom’s face went sad as he heard his tummy rumbling. He had left his food in his bag and now it was gone. Tom sat on the ground. Then “Tom, Tom. Where are you?” said a voice. “I’m here, “ yelled Tom at the top of his voice .Tom sat up so fast to see who it was. Then out of nowhere came his dad. “Come on Tom lets go home,” said Dad. Then that sneaky person came back again and stole his scooter. “Wait Dad I have to get my scooter”, Tom said to his dad as they were about to walk back to the car. So Tom turned around and he noticed his scooter wasn’t there .Tom started to look around the unknown school and he saw footprints leading to a door then he saw scooter tracks in the mud. Then he looked somewhere else and found his bag.”My bag”, said Tom and he ran and got his bag and put it on his back. “My scooter” said Tom. “Come on Tom”, said Dad. “I’m coming”, replied Sam. Then the sneaky person went in front of them and said “hello”. “Hi said Sam.” Do you want to live with us?” asked Tom.” Yes” said the sneaky person. “ Come on then let’s go home”, said Sam. And they did.

BY Ruby

THE END

The Mystery Of The Missing Harp.
By Ruth Quinn “Amy! Bebo! Help!” yelled Gemma. Gemma was a grey eyed, gold haired, brown skinned and a nine year old girl. Gemma loved inquiry and art. Gemma’s best friend was Amy. Amy was nine years old, had blue eyes, peach skin, orange hair, loved art and school and had a pet dog named Bebo. Bebo had light grey fur, a red ball, green eyes, a wet pink tongue, gold crackers and a purple bowl. Gemma, Amy and Bebo were just leaving their school when… as quick as a flash Gemma was gone! “ Bebo. We have a mystery to solve. I JUST KNOW IT!” Then… Amy’s radio turned on. “ Aaahhh! That almost gave me a heart attack!” Amy reached out for her radio and turned the radio off. Amy looked back and Bebo was gone too! Then Amy heard a familiar bark in the distance. “ That was a close one.” Exclaimed Amy. Amy caught up with Bebo and soon she found out when he had run away. Bebo had found a clue! “ Wait up Bebo!” called Amy. Bebo was scampering along and … froze like a statue, Bebo’s hair stuck up. Bebo started to growl. “ What’s up Bebo?” asked Amy. Amy and Bebo looked at the sky. “ Its lucky I brought my flash light.” Exclaimed Amy. Suddenly … Amy froze. She stood by Bebo’s side. Now she new why Bebo had froze. Someone was lurking behind them! Then … “Amy! Bebo! Help!” came a familiar voice. “ Gemma!” Amy switched on her flash light. The person had gone. “ That was a close one!” Amy wiped her forehead. “ Now, where are you?” “ Up here in a net. The line ends at the end of the trunk.” Whispered Gemma. “ I brought some food if you’re hungry,” whispered Amy back. Suddenly … there were more growls. Not Bebo’s but the strangers dogs! “ Gemma! Do you have you’re knife and cellphone?” Questioned Amy. “ Here! Quick!” Gemma handed them down. Amy asked Gemma “ Why didn’t you use you’re knife to free yourself?” “ I was too scared to even move or get my knife and cellphone till you came.” Came Gemma’s reply. Snap! Gemma was free! “111!” reminded Amy. So Gemma flipped open her cellphone and dialed 111. Ring, ring, ring, ring! Went Gemma’s cellphone. “Who do you want?” came the voice. “ Police please. My name is Gemma and my friend just rescued me from a person who caught me and hung me in a net from a tree. The person told his dogs to guard me until he returned with the stolen bank money, a stolen golden harp that belonged to a museum and a truck.” That sounds like Billybom Bancuther. He just escaped to nights ago. The police are on there way now Gemma.” The voice replied. The police finally arrived at the school and had their red and blue flashing lights and sirens on. Weow, weow! It went. Billybom was found in the truck terrified and he went back to jail. “ Thanks to you girls and you’re dog Billybom Bancuther is safely back at jail. For your reward you will get one medal each.” “ Thank you sir. We were only helping. We didn’t know this was going to be our reward.” They gave the medals to the girls and went back to the police station. The girls and Bebo were going to have a sleepover that night. They were tired when they got to Amy’s home. The next morning … Bang, bang! “ Looks like we have another mystery to solve.” said Gemma.

** The Secret Hide Out. ** “5x 55” “275” yelled out Rex. Rex was at school. It was a very, very sunny Friday. Its time to get your home work sheet said the teacher. She placed the homework sheets on the ground and Rex picked his one up and glued it into his homework book. Rex had a Blue top on and Red pants. Rex also had blonde hair. Beep, beep, beep the bell had just rung and Rex and his classmates ran out of the school. Rex rushed home and saw his dad reading the newspaper. Rex saw that kids had been going missing from school on the front page of the paper. Slobber walked in the door. Slobber was a dog that was brown, 5 years old and very big. Rex saw the time it was 10:00am. Rex told his dad that he was going to bed. During the night there was a big bang!! Rex and Slobber woke up in fright. “What was that”? Screamed Rex. Rex and slobber sprinted out side. There was nothing there. Rex and Slobber walked along the path and then they saw some foot prints on the ground then they looked up and saw a lever that had never been there before. There was a note on it. Rex read it out it said, “Do not pull if you want to live”. Rex looked around and saw no way how he could die so he pulled the lever and Rex and slobber went flying though a hole that suddenly came up. They landed in a place that looked like a cave and it was very hard. “Its very misty” said Rex. Rex walked around a corner and they saw lots of children trapped in cages. Rex ran up to one of the cages and tried to open it but it was no use, it would not open. Slobber walked around the next corner and he saw a key so he jumped up and bit the key and it fell down and he dragged it over to Rex. Rex was surprised that Slobber had found the key. Slobber gave the key to Rex and Rex opened all the cages and all the children were free. Then Rex saw a phone and called the police and told them to come to the cave. When the cops came they saw the lever and thought it was a trick but they pulled it and went zooming down the mountain. When the cops got to the bottom of the mountain they ran around the corner saw Rex and Slobber. The cops asked Rex a few questions but then the robbers came rushing round the corner. The cops saw them and the robbers started running away but one of them tripped over and they caught him. The other one wasn’t looking where he was going and crashed into a rocky wall and the cops caught him too. So they were both caught. The cops said “thank you” to Rex and Slobber Rex and Slobber went home. The next day Rex and Slobber looked at the paper and it said, “Kids have stopped going missing and Rex and Slobber have saved the day”.

By Jordan Renton

THE END

The Tiki Mask and the Grave By Josh Child

“Come on Frank lets go and see Steven’s show,” yelled Joe. “ Coming,” Frank yelled back. Frank was an 18-year-old boy who had dark hair, brown eyes, loves sport and is a detective, unlike his brother Joe. Joe has blonde hair, blue eyes, also loves sport and a detective too. Frank got his keys and headed out to the car and drove out to Steven’s show. When they got there the show had nearly started. So they snuck inside and they quickly found their seats just as the show began. Steven was a chubby, plump man with a green top and black hair. Suddenly a man burst threw the door and shouted at Steven. “You stole my idea” yelled the mysterious man. “No I didn’t,” Steven yelled back. Suddenly a tiki mask fell from the wall and it was heading for Steven. Frank and Joe quickly got out of their seats and rushed to help. Frank got there first and made tackle to get Steven away from the falling mask. It was just about down and they hadn’t made it far enough yet. Frank made one last jump and this time they made it. While Frank was saving Steven, Joe was chasing the mysterious man but he got away. Steven then said “thank you” to Frank and Joe and asked them to be his bodyguard. On the way to Steven’s haunted mansion he explained what had been going on at his mansion. Mirrors were shattering and a rip in the garden. Then they decided to have a look around for clues. All that they found was a maid called Michelle. She told them that she was just cleaning up the broken mirrors from last night. Michelle was skinny with dark hair, blue eyes, and pale skin and was good at first aid. The next afternoon Frank went out for a drive to find the RIP company that made the rip in the garden. Frank finally found it and said. “Who recently bought a rip from this company?” He said it was a man called Mike and that he had it printed with the words REST IN PEACE, STEVEN. While Frank was away something happened at Steven’s mansion. An axe fell from the wall and knocked him out. Then while Frank was driving back, a man in a car chased after him. After about 20 minutes his fuel ran out. Then he got out of the car and ran down the hill and it was when he was doing this that he noticed he was being followed by a man had a baseball bat. Suddenly the man made a dive tackle but Frank got out of the way and ran back. Suddenly he knew who had done the crime. It was Michelle, the mysterious man and Mike. When Frank got back he had a drink of water and got the police to come and arrest Michelle, the mysterious man and Mike.